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Kostia Dmytriiev's avatar

I was really immersed throughout the scene. Great descriptions of the fight tghtoughout the chapter and great showcase of what powers Cassisu may hold.

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“Dâi khâ, Kru!” Anje’s straight-line charge slows, her motions becoming liquid as she begins to move laterally to his advance. She orbits his position, her shoulders and hips rotating as she circles, changing what she presents to her enemies with every step: front, side, back, side, front.

He attempts to engage Anje, but she retreats. Each time he advances, she adjusts, keeping her opponent between herself and the other five, breaking sightlines whenever she can.<<--- FIRE. This is freaking brilliant! It flows so easily.

When I read this earlier, I was really impressed with it all. My favorite scene is still where the bad guys are like deleting the walls and the floor. Then they expand it and make a freaking ghost arena. Ignore my lame interpretation. I would use your words, but when I comment, the article goes stinkin' bye-bye.

This is my favorite one thus far. Action-packed and brilliantly done. You have mad storytelling skills. When are you making your next Write Club appearance???

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